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作者: NC囧hi 时间: 9-9-2018 01:12
标题: 柠檬（短篇）
这是一个很平淡惨白的故事。

生活给了她一袋柠檬。
可她只想要他。

我自幼与他相识，打出生起便是邻居。
便是也算得上青梅竹马了。

从幼稚园到小学，都一直喜欢粘着他。
一起上学，一起回家。一起吃饭，做作业，玩耍。

我家后院有颗茂盛的柠檬树，每年丰收都硕果累累。
所以每年他生日我都会送一大袋柠檬。

最初对他的感觉，可能以为只是一味的，单纯的，喜欢一个很好的朋友那般。

直到我小学某次在闺蜜家过夜。
她夜半把我踢醒。

“你做梦就算了。还说梦话。快说和他都干了什么好事。”她一脸奸笑。

我一个枕头扔过去。

她很敏捷地躲开了。

从那天以后我就知道我是躲不开了。

我喜欢他，但也只能默默藏在心底。

我怕我一说出来，就变味了。
一切也怕就完了。

上中学前的一两年，我戴牙套了。
口齿不清，平翘舌音部分。

就那么说话不清楚的我还是和他一起等回家的车。

我那天放学就这么口齿不清地跟他说，“你再不快点我们就坐不上公交车了。”
然后他戏弄着学我的口吻说了一遍。

那时的我性子暴躁。
直袭向他要害。

他回复我的只有三个字。
俏丽吗。

上初中之后我们就慢慢疏远了。

但初一还是一起在学校的花圃里种上了一株柠檬树苗。

但是他却开始说更喜欢太阳花了。

大家都知道，只有我不知道。
他有喜欢的女孩子了。
他说喜欢向日葵，只因为那是她的名字。

后来他们在一起了。
她的闺蜜也和他的挚友在一起了。

她就是那个不小心差点毁了我和他种的柠檬树苗的那位。

我和他渐行渐远。
终究无发可说。

他的生日再和我无关。

多余的柠檬从树上掉落，在泥土里渐渐腐烂。
正如我内心的某道微不足道却足以致命的伤疤。

我想，也许时间久了我就能忘了他。

但就在大家都以为他们最幸福的时候，他们大吵一架。
然后和好如初。

就在大家以为他们会这样平安无事的时候。

她死了。

听说是又和他吵了一架。
吵完过马路时出的车祸。

她的葬礼全年级都去了，除了他。

我静静地在灵柩边放了一束柠檬枝桠。
上面还有含苞的花骨朵。
远远闻着都有香气。

我知道她喜欢向日葵，但也远远见过她拿柠檬泡茶水喝。

我突然觉得可能有些对不起她。
过去种种因为他而刁难他。

但事实却证明他只是个大猪蹄子。
无论是对我还是对她。

作者: MICHELLE07 时间: 9-9-2018 01:59
伤感

作者: kevin妈妈 时间: 9-9-2018 06:43
下次写篇开心的

作者: Earlgrey 时间: 9-9-2018 06:45
大猪蹄子。。。一口茶差点喷屏幕上

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 9-9-2018 10:55

MICHELLE07 9-9-2018 01:59

дü

作者: MICHELLE07 时间: 9-9-2018 14:27
本帖最后由 MICHELLE07 于 9-9-2018 14:47 编辑

我初中时写“小说”，也会写死亡和绝望
卡耐基老师说，这可能是“显要感”需求在内心的召唤
我那时写自己要死了，心情很爽——可见，在现实里不够显要
而如果写其他人呢，通常会虐最爱的人
就想试试，最害怕的事情发生了，会怎样

至于爱情。。。陷入爱的标志之一，是“否认”它

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 9-9-2018 15:12

MICHELLE07 发表于 9-9-2018 14:27
我初中时写“小说”，也会写死亡和绝望
卡耐基老师说，这可能是“显要感”需求在内心的召唤
我那时写自己 ...

说的好大脑越是否认内心越是想去证明

作者: 春浅 时间: 9-9-2018 18:33
我觉得这篇比较清爽啊~
结构完整，故事不算太悲伤，毕竟是青涩的爱情....
死亡说来容易，现实大多还是，失恋，分手而终吧

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 10-9-2018 01:54

9-9-2018 18:33
~
....
...

д Ц

作者: 春浅 时间: 10-9-2018 09:06

NC囧hi 发表于 10-9-2018 01:54
д Ц

好惨，手机编辑这么悲剧，简直就是猜谜

作者: MICHELLE07 时间: 10-9-2018 17:27
@ubuntuhk 来看看手机版灾难现场
真的真的没催你，就是想安慰一下新同学，大家在关心着这个问题

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 10-9-2018 19:51

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作者: ubuntuhk 时间: 10-9-2018 23:15

MICHELLE07 发表于 10-9-2018 17:27
@ubuntuhk 来看看手机版灾难现场
真的真的没催你，就是想安慰一下新同学，大家在关心着这个问题

@huanged 帮忙一起看看这个手机发帖乱码的灾难。。。

作者: ubuntuhk 时间: 10-9-2018 23:15

NC囧hi 发表于 10-9-2018 19:51
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请暂时用手机上的电脑版发帖来避免乱码。

作者: MICHELLE07 时间: 10-9-2018 23:21

ubuntuhk 发表于 10-9-2018 23:15
请暂时用手机上的电脑版发帖来避免乱码。

正是因为用电脑版，输好字后，突然切换到手机版，乱码了 ---- 我的经验
不知道其他网友是什么情况

感觉改进手机版的需求，很迫切啊
除了乱码问题，还有其它方面体验
有办法吗？@huanged

作者: ubuntuhk 时间: 10-9-2018 23:52

MICHELLE07 发表于 10-9-2018 23:21
正是因为用电脑版，输好字后，突然切换到手机版，乱码了 ---- 我的经验
不知道其他网友是什么情况

哦，原来是这样。。。

作者: ubuntuhk 时间: 10-9-2018 23:53

MICHELLE07 发表于 10-9-2018 23:21
正是因为用电脑版，输好字后，突然切换到手机版，乱码了 ---- 我的经验
不知道其他网友是什么情况

那我先把手机版关闭了，反正现在手机版也不好用。

作者: cynthiawu 时间: 10-9-2018 23:59
伤感

作者: cynthiawu 时间: 10-9-2018 23:59
我是用手机上来的，选择电脑版

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 11-9-2018 00:30

ubuntuhk 发表于 10-9-2018 23:15
请暂时用手机上的电脑版发帖来避免乱码。

好的抱歉给您以及各位添麻烦了

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 11-9-2018 00:31
我是每天一早醒来刷刷手机
然后

谁知道就乱码了

回复米版主和春版主的帖子内容大致是嗯嗯好的以示赞同一类

自己的是伤感文学交流变成一个手机批斗大会类型

作者: cynthiawu 时间: 11-9-2018 00:40
以为楼主回答的是泰文

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:01
原文
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I have loved him from the start.

But he was always too dumb to realise.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:01
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It was like the time I gave him lemons, but he frowned and asked me what that was for.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:02
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Or how we used to be practically one person since we never left each other's side.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:02
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Or that one random day when we ran towards the bus stop together.
But I had my plates on for braces, so I sounded like I had a lisp when I said "damn I'm gonna mith my buth."

While he only mocked me back.
"Yuna is going to mith her buth."
I kicked him near that sensitive spot.
And he swore.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:02
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That was the first day he swore at me.

Maybe I should have known by then.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:03
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When my bestie had a sleepover night at her place with only the two of us, I had a dream and he was there.

When I woke up the next day, she had this funny look on her face and played a recording on her phone.

Shit.

I called out his name in my dreams.

I tried to snatch her phone but I failed.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:03
6

We were still okay after we got in high school, but somehow we managed to drift away from each other.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:04
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It wasn't just because of the lemons I gave him every single birthday.

Maybe I should have figured out there might have been something to do with his brotherly best mate hating lemons.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:04
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But he loved sunflowers more than anything else.

And when I asked him why, he said he might have been in love with this girl who loved sunflowers.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:05
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And there was this annoyingly dumb girl at school, who killed the lemon tree he planted with me in our first year of high school.

He even comforted her and said it was nothing.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:05
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And I just couldn't bear with it.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:05
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Until they got so close one day.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:06
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And everyone knew they were dating except for me.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:06
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I tore up her painting of sunflowers in art class.

And god, I hated her so much.

(嗯？真真是一段激烈的感情戏，笑)

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:07
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She was making my life a living hell.

And it was all because of him.

（所以我的女主你到底爱谁）

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:07
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He even got mad at me and scolded me for everything.

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:08
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After all this time, when I thought at least, he was my friend.

（年少冲动不懂事，误把友情当爱情，结果亏本一场空）

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:08
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And I really really thought i loved him.

（最简单的真情告白还是忏悔）

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:11
17+

In the end she died.

And it was because of him.

They got into a messy argument and she didn't watch the road.

They said her blood type was the rare rh negative A one.
And he was the closest they could find to help.

But that still didn't work.

I went to her funeral like everyone else at school.

And I brought a lemon tree branch, still blossoming.
I thought she might liked them as well, because she often drank lemon tea.

"Sorry. I hope you are happy where you are now. You can rip."

I almost whispered.

I wasn't the nicest person to her and she didn't like me that much anyway.

And he was right in front of my house with a gloomy face.

I decided to walk past him.

But he pulled me into a tight hug.

And he was sobbing.

As expected.

"I never knew the meaning behind those lemons, and I never understood when you gave them to me, nor when she gave them to me. And it was all my fault she died!"

"It's all too late now."
Maybe that came out too cold.

Long silence.

"Ggo out with me, just for once, will you?"

"Yeah, and let you treat me just like a trash can because I still like you and you can just treat me however you want. Yeah, sure."

"I'm sorry, I really am."
It came out as a whisper.

Even if that meant I'd have to go through pain and possibly get hurt by and because of him.

And see how he suffers from time to time of that daunting memory.

But I thought I'd just be there for him, and with him.

And make a lemonade from the lemons life give me.

======
This is how this ends.

2017/02/04

(他是大猪蹄子，她是傻猪蹄子)

作者: NC囧hi 时间: 6-10-2018 22:15
全文完

原文也是一天码完的

笑

作者: MICHELLE07 时间: 6-10-2018 22:30
楼主棒
中英文对照的原创柠檬
哪个是你的母语呀？

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