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3 It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look good. Architects should not produce buildings as works of art. Do you agree or disagree.
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Architects often find them in a dilemma when trying to design a building as there is always a controversial subject that whether the functionality of building is more important than it’s exterior. In my point of view, both of them are equally important.

It is undeniable that functionality is the first thing architects should take into consideration before they design a building. Modern architectural styles are, in many instance, are produced to serve an exact purpose. Large-span factories boot productivity as they can accommodate workshops where heavy equipment is stored and used for assembly-line production. And in urban areas, high-rise buildings can help urban developer save valuable land. Moreover, architects now use plenty of modern building materials, which can save energy and preserve environment, so that offer city dwellers better living conditions.

Nevertheless, the appearance of building is also important. In modern society, buildings are the most significant part of a city. People can easily identify a city by the landmark buildings of the city. Also, building style represents cultural identities of the city. So, beautiful structures can both enhance cityscape and rise reputation for the city. On the other hand, with the development of modern technologies, new design concepts are being adopted to construct modern buildings, which not only enable buildings meet practical needs, but also have splendid exterior.

Overall, my conclusion is that architects should take both functionality and appearance into account. In this way, people can enjoy their lives, and the city can inherit cultures.




6分有么

fatwu

有的老师，包括几个名师，认为写equally important不会拿高分。不管是真是假，建议不要这样写，以免悲剧。侧重某一边就行了。楼主文笔不错。

xiaoyi_lee

我感觉比我写得好，不过给楼主提点建议，下面这条好像跟这篇文章没有关系。这篇文章我感觉就是应该讨论功能和外观的利弊，所以不要写其他内容，我个人感觉这句跟主题无关。
Moreover, architects now use plenty of modern building materials, which can save energy and preserve environment, so that offer city dwellers better living conditions.

YUEXMA

哥能斗胆把第一段小小的改一下么。。。

Architects often find themselves （觉得无指向的他们 / 觉得他们自己，） in a dilemma when trying to design a building as there ( it, 因为有一个争议/因为..... 是个争议 is always a controversial subject that whether the functionality of building is more important than it’s ( its 它是/它的)exterior (换成appearance更合适，外部/外表) . In my point of view, both of them are equally important. (连续出现important)


某些句子的整体结构做点小调整可以更加紧凑简洁清晰一点。

Architects often find themselves in a dilemma, being irresolute over making the design a functional success or an aesthetic masterpiece. Actually it is always  controversial that whether the building's functionality outweighs its appearance. In my point of view, these two aspects are equally important.

原帖由 chen2mao 于 17-2-2012 00:48 发表

                               
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3 It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look good. Architects should not produce buildings as works of art. Do you agree or disagree.
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cloudsflo

我以为你1月7日就考了呢, 6分应该没问题呀

echox

写得比我强多了
你看我都有6.5